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An increasing number of people do not know their neighbors, and there is no longer a sense of community. What do you think are the causes of this situation? What are the solutions to solve the problem?

There is no denying the fact that an increasing number of
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, and there is no longer a sense of community.
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solutions
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 are plenty. One of the reasons is work-life balance issues. To illustrate, longer working hours and commutes leave us less time for social interaction, even with our closest family members.
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, there is a rise in digital communication, which reduces the need for face-to-face interaction.
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, many
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, if they wanted to ask their
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 about something, are more likely to send them a message rather than see them in person. In terms of solutions, organising community events about how to balance work and life might be beneficial. Basically, gathering experts, activists, or life coaches to give free speeches and consultations for citizens about how to live a balanced life and manage time properly.
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, spreading awareness about the importance of knowing or checking on your next-door
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 is crucial.
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, a recent study pointed out that 30% of deaths in Japan are
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discovered inside homes after a long time because no one checks on their
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.
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, fostering
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 to communicate with their
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 is mandatory to maintain
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 and strong community. In conclusion, there are many causes of
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 phenomenon. It is
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 true that holding conferences to help
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 manage their lives effectively,
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 clear explanations for the public about the possible outcomes of
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 an approach, can help significantly to address or minimise the issue.

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language
Use short sentences and common words so it is easy to read.
grammar
Check spelling and fix typos, like 'soultions'.
content
The essay shows a plan to explain causes and solutions.
structure
It uses linking words and has clear paragraphs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • transient lifestyle
  • work-life balance
  • commutes
  • digital communication
  • face-to-face interaction
  • structural design
  • communal spaces
  • cultural values
  • individualism
  • mobility
  • globalization
  • culturally diverse
  • integration
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