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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The three pie charts illustrates the percentage of consumtion of Sodium saturated fat and added sugar in breakfast, lunch, dinner and
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 for average person in USA.
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, the amount of sodium and saturated fat has the largest portion of daily
intake
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 in dinner
meals
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,
while
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 it shows a nearly equal
intake
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 for other
meals
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 and
snacks
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.The added sugar has the biggest consumption in
snacks
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, and almost similar amount of
intake
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 for other
meals
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. In dinner
meals
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, soudium shows high consumption percentage nearly half of the other
meals
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. saturated fat comes second with a approximetly over third of the consumption compared to other
meals
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. added sugar has the biggest
intake
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 in
snacks
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 with 42%. meanwhile, in other
meals
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 it displays similar
intake
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 around fifth of the chart for each meal.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, intake, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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