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You have recently moved to a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you decided to move to a different city Describe the new city and accommodation Ask your friend to arrange a visit You do NOT need to write any addresses

Dear
joy
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, How are u
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 I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I just relocated from Lincoln to
London
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. The main reason I left Lincoln was because of the job opportunity I got in
London
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.
it
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 is a data analyst position which pays better than my previous job
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and it
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provide
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 me with the chance to expand my career because
London
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 is the key
of
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IT
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the IT
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 industry in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom Now let me give you an insight into my new home or town ,
London
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 is
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the center
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center
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 of the United Kingdom.
it
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 has a lot of business opportunities for different people around the world. What I love about
London
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 is its scenery. It has amazing views.
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, there is
an
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 beautiful cathedral in the
center
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 of
London
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 which displays different lights every night. It is a sight to behold The second aspect of
London
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 I love is the affordable accommodation. The
accomodations
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accommodations
very
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are very
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 moderate and decent for anyone .
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 my house is very spacious and big with an incredible
sight
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view
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 of
sea
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the sea
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 which comes
a
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at a
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very nice price . With
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price
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 I am able to save some money for the future Next week, there will be a festival
In
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London
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 and I would love to invite you there. It will be a great experience for you
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 you can use
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 opportunity to stay with me for a few days. I Can
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 opportunity to show you the beauty of
London
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 I really hope you can come and see me Your sincerely Kunbi

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Open with a clear reason to move so the reader knows the purpose.
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Split the letter into three parts: reason to move, new city and home, invite friend.
coherence and cohesion
Use one idea per paragraph and start a new paragraph for each idea.
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Fix spelling and grammar and use proper greetings and closing.
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Keep a friendly and simple tone throughout.
task achievement
You tell the reader you moved and why.
coherence and cohesion
You ask your friend to visit.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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