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Options vary on whether students should take a gap year before going into higher education. Discuss the possible advantages and disadvantages of taking a year out. Do you believe that taking a gap year is a good idea?

There has been an ongoing debate on the fact
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 that the children should take a
break
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 before
persuing
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 their higher
studies
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. Some people agree to
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 point because it gives them enough
time
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 to realise their field of interest,
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 others disagree as it can disconnect them from their education. I strongly believe that taking a gap is not a good idea, and I will explicate my point in the essay below. To commence with, some individuals consider it favourable for them to take a
time
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 off from
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studies
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 because it offers them
time
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 to discover their interests. When a kid is studying continuously, they are too busy to realise
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 which subject they want to develop their career in.
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, taking a gap offers them
opportunity
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 to explore various fields, and make a calculated decision, rather than a mechanical one.
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, Sushant Singh Rajput, a
well known
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 Indian actor, wanted to be an engineer at first.
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, he decided to be an actor
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 when he took a
break
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 from his
studies
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 after completing his graduation
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 and
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 his keen interest in acting.
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, there is
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 a disadvantage
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 taking a
break
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education. There are thousands of distractions available in
the
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society that
prevents
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 a person from re-indulging in
studies
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, once they
break
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 off from it.
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,
this
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 causes them to disconnect from their classes,
thus
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 endangering their future.
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, sometimes taking a
break
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 confuses a child as they find themselves in a dilemma of
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whether to study
further
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 or not.
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, most of the children who drop out of their high schools
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 hardly go back to the institute, and
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 either end up at
low-wages
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 jobs or doing illegal activities. Conclusively, I believe that there are both advantages and disadvantages of taking a
break
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studies
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. It is good to take some
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time-off
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 since it helps in self-discovery and finding one's favourite subject for a better career, but at the same
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time
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 if the gap is too long, it will disconnect a kid from their
studies
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 and will divert their focus from completing education.
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, a limited
time
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of
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difference between high school and professional
studies
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 is considered safe because it will only encourage a child to clear the mind for
further
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 educational
persuit
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pursuit
, without any risk of losing interest.

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task response
Be clear about your view in the first line. Say if you think a gap year is good or not. Then add the good and bad parts with simple facts or clear ideas.
coherence
Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence. Use a few linking words to move from one idea to the next, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so'. Keep words the same when you speak of the same idea.
language
Try to use more specific examples and explain how they fix or show the point. Check grammar and spelling so the point stays clear.
structure
The essay has a real plan with three parts: intro, body, and conclusion.
balance
The writer tries to show both sides of the issue.
example
An example is used to back up one point.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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