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Nowadays there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all arounf the world . What are the causes and solutions of this problem .

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 knowing about increasing the
world
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's air pollution and harmful events for
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
, human activities are
being
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becoming
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 more and more harmful
for
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to
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environment
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the environment
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.
This
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 essay will examine the main causes of
rapid
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the rapid
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incrase
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increase
of
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in
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rubbis
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rubbish
 amounts all around the
world
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 and possible solutions to the problem. The two main causes of
pollution
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the pollution
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 problem are uncontrolled
population
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 growth and
existing
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the existence
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 of numerous unconscious
people
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. Nowadays, everybody
realizes
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realises
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 that
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world's
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the world's
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population
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 is getting
more
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apply
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higher. Related to
population
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 growth,
amount
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the amount
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 of trash is remarkably increasing from day to day. Since
this
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world
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 has
capacity
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the capacity
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for ensuring
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to ensure
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 a proper life for human beings and
also
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 other living forms,
by
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with
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rising
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the rising
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world's
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world
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population
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population,
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 we get
more
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a more
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 limited life.
Also
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,
number
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the number
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 of conscious
people
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are
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is
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 being a minority from being majority of society.
Therefore
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, there are more unconscious
people
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 who
does
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do
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 not use any
recycle
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recycled
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 vehicles and
removes
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remove
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 their trash from their
home
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homes
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 into
environment
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the environment
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.
On the other hand
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, there are two possible solutions to
this
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 problem are promoting
people
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's awareness and following punishment procedures.
Firstly
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, if we had more
unconcious
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unconscious
people
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, we
have
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would have
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 to promote their awareness
for saving
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to save
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planet
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the planet
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 from pollution.
For instance
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, in streets, there should be more warning signs and
also
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 commercial
tabelas
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tables
.
Also
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, there should be a subject on schools.
Moreover
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, after these situations are not being followed by society, there should be
extra
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an extra
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 application for
people
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.
This
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 extra application includes
penaltization
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penalty
 procedures.
Although
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 conveying
message
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a message
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 to
people
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by
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in
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 many ways is not successful,
people
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 should
be obeying
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obey
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 these rules by laws. If one
who do
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does
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 not follow procedures,
it
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they
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 should be
penaltized
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penalised
 by paying money or even going to jail.
To conclude
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,
people
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's activities are causing for rapid increase
of
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in
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 rubbish amounts all around the
world
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.
However
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, we can significantly
enlight
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enlighten
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people
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 and
also
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 make them
obligation
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obligated
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for obeying
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to obey
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rules
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the rules
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 about these problems.

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structure
Plan your essay: state the problem, give two causes, give two fixes, and end with a short finish.
cohesion
Use link words to help flow. Words like first, also, and then keep text smooth.
content
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grammar
Check spelling and word form. Use the same noun and fix any big word mistakes.
present
The idea is clear and fits the task.
form
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