Topic- Children today spend more time watching television than they did in the past. Describe some of the advantages and disadvantages for Children. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant example from your knowledge.

Kids have spent their
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in front of the
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since it was first invented. Unfortunately, the time spent
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watching
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increasing continuously. By
analyzing
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the difference between the generations, we can have an idea about both the good sides and bad sides of increasing screentime.
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, because of being exposed to all the visual effects from an early age, today's children are struggling with dreaming. It is so much easier for them to watch the film rather than
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the book.
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, Gen Z read the Harry Potter books and
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watched the movie
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because of the movie release dates. In comparison, Gen Alpha directly watched the movie because it is more accessible and effortless compared to books. Since they have gotten used to it from the beginning, I believe
visualizing
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things and creating new scenarios in their head are not as easy for them as it is for prior generations. Even though it has disadvantages, in some ways it can
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be beneficial to them as a matter of learning and experiencing the
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.
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the technological age that we live in, it is crucial to get the information from anywhere, anytime. Thanks to
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, people can learn about what is going on all around the
world
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and be able to grow with a global perspective.
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, a girl from Turkey and a boy from France can watch the same cartoons despite the fact that they have different cultural backgrounds.
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helps children not only to know about their culture but
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to become
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citizens. In a nutshell, the key is the balance. Like every other thing in the
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,
TV
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time can be both beneficial and harmful. I believe it is control that we need between losing our dream capacity and gaining a global perspective.

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task response
Plan your intro to state both sides and give your view. Say what you will talk about in order.
task response
Give 2 or 3 clear examples for each point and say why they matter.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and idea, like also, but, however, and finally.
language
Keep sentences short and clear. Check for any long or odd phrases.
task response
Finish with a short end that restates your view.
structure
The essay shows a clear view and a plan with intro, middle ideas, and end.
content
It uses real ideas from life ( Gen Z, Gen Alpha ) and a simple view on how TV can help us see the world.
structure
The idea to end with a quick wrap up is good.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • watch
  • television
  • children
  • time
  • now
  • past
  • learn
  • language
  • science
  • math
  • story
  • show
  • family
  • health
  • sleep
  • activity
  • exercise
  • focus
  • attention
  • limit
  • plan
  • quality
  • ads
  • learning
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • content
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