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Precautions is better than cure. researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measure. To what extent do you agree?

Rather than trying to find a cure, being careful and not getting that disease is more convenient in economic
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 suggestion because
,
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If
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government
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the government
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distrubute
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distributes
 their budget to
precautions
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precautions,
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 it would be beneficial for both public health and
health
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the health
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 industry itself. The primary reason for
prioritizing
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prioritising
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 prevention is its profound economic benefit. Treating heart
disases
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diseases
 and
cronical
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chronic
 disorders can
cost
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be
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 more expensive compared to not
to
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getting sick. Take a healthy adult , he/she is most likely to be more productive than a sick person,
that
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 means
it
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 can contribute to the nation's
finance
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finances
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 much more than a person who is ill.
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government
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the government
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 can use their money to support local and free sports activities and call
centers
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centres
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 for
quit
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 smoking and alcohol.
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 would be more sustainable in both economic and welfare
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, preventive measures are fundamentally more effective and humane than seeking cures. Without all the insurance and hospital expenses- these are
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 great costs for
government
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the government
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-
,
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apply
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If
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if
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 governments would motivate
people
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 to live healthy and
incentieve
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incentivise
 it , that makes the community more happy and peaceful. By that solution ,
people
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 may gain healthy
habbits
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habits
 and
minimize
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minimise
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 the risk of having diseases.Think about a country
,
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 where
people
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taking
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take
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 their supplements,
doing
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do
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phsyical
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physical
 activities, and
socialize
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socialise
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 without bad
habbits
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habits
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 as smoking and drinking ; they would not only be healthy
people
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 they
also
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 become peaceful and cheerful. In conclusion, politicians should invest in
preventions
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prevention
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 if they want to
maximize
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maximise
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 the benefits from the money they spend. It is not only beneficial for
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the governement's
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governement's
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government's
 budget but
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people
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's
wellnes
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well-being
.
Ans
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And
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 it appears to be a win-win situation
at the end
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 of the day.

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planning
Plan your essay with a clear plan: intro, two or three body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
organization
Stick to one main idea per paragraph. Do not add many points without proof.
coherence
Make each paragraph link to the question. Use simple linking words to show flow.
evidence
Use simple, real examples and explain how they prove your point.
language
Check spelling, grammar, and sentence form; use only simple, correct sentences.
stance
Clear view on the topic.
content
Some good ideas on prevention and on how money could be used.
evidence
Effort to add examples to support points.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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