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Gaining work experience is more useful in today's society than studying for a high level education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this?

In
this
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 age, becoming experienced in professional life is more beneficial than getting a degree.
Work
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 experience gives practical skills and can lead to early earnings. In comparison, not all people can find a
job
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 easily, and in
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 a situation, education can open doors in many fields.
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 they both have good parts, the best path depends on the person and the
job
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. First and foremost, gaining practical and hands-on skills through real tasks increases the chance of early earning and financial independence.
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,
instead
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 of going to university for 3-4 years, the person can just start to
work
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 immediately and be able to make savings in that time period. In comparison, a lack of formal learning and not having a degree can limit their access to certain jobs.
This
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 not only harms their place on the
job
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 market, but
also
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 their self-development. For employers, a university graduate seems like a better choice than a high-school graduate in terms of qualifications. Education and a degree are helpful when it comes to finding a
job
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. In conclusion, as gaining
work
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 experience has both good and bad sides, in many cases combination creates the perfect match. Working and gaining hands-on experience
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 studying can offer so much. Society should value both
work
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 and study and help people choose the right path.

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task response
Plan your work. Start with your view. Then add two strong points for more work and two for study, each with a clear example. End with a short line.
coherence
Make the idea flow clear. Use easy words to link parts, like 'first','also','but','in conclusion'. Keep to one real idea per paragraph.
language
Use short and plain sentences. Use common words. Check run on sentences and fix punctuation.
examples
Give a real, simple example for each point. Use one fact or small idea you know well.
content
The view is clear and fair to both sides.
structure
The idea of mixing work and study is shown.
content
One clear example of early earning from work.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • gain
  • lose
  • work
  • job
  • career
  • education
  • degree
  • training
  • skill
  • experience
  • money
  • cost
  • risk
  • benefit
  • future
  • society
  • path
  • option
  • choice
  • team
  • boss
  • colleague
  • network
  • practice
  • learn
  • study
  • university
  • college
  • school
  • intern
  • on-the-job
  • learning
  • opportunity
  • progress
  • moving up
  • promotion
  • qualification
  • credential
  • market
  • change
  • balance
  • mix
  • part-time
  • full-time
  • lifelong
  • evidence
  • opinion
  • therefore
  • however
  • on the other hand
  • in addition
  • moreover
  • but
  • yet
  • although
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