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In many countries there is a widening gap between the rich and the poor. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In numerous nations, there is a huge imbalance between wealthy and poor citizens.
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 reason is that
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the government
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 treat
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the poor
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 unequally.
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 can be prevented by taxing both
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 their income level, and
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 financial
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. It is
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common knowledge that
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 big states , authorities tend to put higher taxes on
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low income
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 families
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 them financial burden
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 there are many loopholes for billionaires to avoid it.
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 creates complaints by the taxpayers.
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, in Great
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Britain
, the public often
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 in front of Buckingham Palace to show their issue with the regulation. One of the main
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 is to revise the
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 system and audit it. By preventing
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frauds
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 by
wealth
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 men,
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the profit
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 of the state can be
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, and
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 money can be used for free schools and hospitals for
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 who struggle financially. Another solution is decreasing the number of taxes on citizens who
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 financially.
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the UAE
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, people are free from income
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, and
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the poverty
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 level is the lowest among Middle East countries. In conclusion,
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the government
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 can minimise the difference between
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the rich
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 and
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the poor
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 by making new
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 laws and detecting illegal
finance
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 activities.

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structure
Plan the idea in a page. One idea per paragraph with a short sentence at the start to show the main point.
content
Explain each point with more detail. Say how it helps and what can be done.
cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, but, so to make the flow easy to follow.
grammar
Check grammar. Fix big mistakes like wrong caps in the middle of sentences and wrong spellings.
examples
Use clear and small examples. The UAE example is good; add a short line on what it shows.
content
The idea of tax fair play is shown
structure
There is an intro, body and conclusion
content
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Your opinion

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