The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese
The flow chart shows the way in which soft cheese is made for consumption.
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, there are five stages
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in the whole soft cheese
producing
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process
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, beginning with mixing water and milk and ending with reducing the temperature of the product.
To begin
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, water and milk are mixed before
transferring
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to the cooling
process
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. And, in the cooling
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process
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the temperature of the mixture is reduced to 5 °C in two
hours
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. The next stage is heating the liquid to around 35 °C within 6
hours
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in order to ferment.
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, the mixture is transferred to the evaporation
process
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, where the heat reaches 100 °C in eight
hours
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. In the final stage, the thick liquid is cooled to around 5 °C in around six
hours
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. After cooling the mixture, it is filtered into two parts. The first filtering
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is separating extra water,
while
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the next filter separates soft cheese , which is ready for consumption.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pasteurization
  • harmful bacteria
  • heated
  • specific temperature
  • optimal
  • enzyme
  • bacterial activity
  • starter cultures
  • rennet
  • fermentation process
  • lactose
  • lactic acid
  • curdle
  • curds and whey
  • cheesecloths
  • drained
  • settling
  • pressed
  • firmer texture
  • salting
  • preservative
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • aged
  • consumed fresh
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