The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.
The table presents the market
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for notebook computer manufacturers worldwide in 2006 and 2007.
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, HP made up the majority of the market
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in both years,
whereas
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Fujitsu-Siemens consistently recorded at lowest figures. HP held 31.4% of the market
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in 2006 and grew modestly to 34% in 2007. Dell remained in the second place, rising from 16.6% to 20.2%,
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Acer's
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slipped slightly from 11.6% to 10.7%. The combined
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of other brands
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contracted, reaching 19.3% in the latter year. Meanwhile, the three remaining brands accounted for under 10% in both years. In 2006, both Lenovo and Toshiba had similar percentages, with Lenovo being slightly higher, at 6.6% versus 6.2%. By 2007, when Lenovo
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a minor drop to 6.2%, Toshiba rose to 7.3%, making it the fourth largest manufacturer. Fujitsu-Siemens,
on the other hand
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, not only represented the lowest shares but
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saw a sharp decline, dropping from 4.8% to 2.3%.

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