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Band 4.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsons where relevant.

The two maps compare the beechwood farm in 1950 with the current changes in the same land space.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is evident that the main development area is in the sheep nearby.
However
Linking Words
, there is no change in the soft fruit area. The most noticeable change that the variety of facilities in the former sheep land. On the west side, the parking lots have been constructed, which are adjacent to both sides of the main road. Meanwhile, the central area has been converted into
the
Correct article usage
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 camping field containing the tents.
Additionally
Linking Words
, solar panels have been installed on the east side corner. A row of holiday cottages has been refurbished and divided into three sections. Apart from that, in 1950, the track was replaced by a road. On the opposite side of the north parking, located in the new farm shop. As for the farmhouse and the chickens' space, are remain unchanged.

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task response
Plan first. Pick 4 to 5 main changes shown on the map and write about each one. Say what there was in 1950 and what is now.
coherence cohesion
Make links clear. Use simple order words like First, Next, Then, Finally to show how the land has changed.
task response
The piece shows several changes like parking, tents, and solar panels.
coherence cohesion
The idea of big change in the land is clear.

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