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The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and mae comparisons with relevant.

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and mae comparisons with relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how many visits were made to a community
website
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 one and two years after its
first
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 launch.
Overall
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, it is clearly visible that the number of users in the second
year
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 was relatively higher in every month , except August, compared to the
first
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year
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. In the
first
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year
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 of use, having less than 1000 users in September, the
website
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 grew in popularity rapidly and reached a user base of 10000 by November.
However
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, by the
last
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 month of winter, the community
website
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 had lost more than 90% of its visitors.
Then
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, the figure witnessed a steady increase, reaching its peak
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 at 15000 in August.
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,only a few(about 2500) people were visiting the
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 the start of the second
year
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. Like in the
first
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year
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, the indicator for the second
year
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also
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 grew dramatically
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 November, stopping just under 20000. After that, there was a gradual decline in January and February. Followingly, total visitors of the
website
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 increased in numbers, peaking at over 20000 in July, but dived back to approximately 12500.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words website, first, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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