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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possibl. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued that some
people
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 consider early education
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 good for children,
while
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other
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others
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 consider education after 7 years
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 the best for
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the
 child.
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withe
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statement
 for early school, first teaching them young is better for their brain and
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leads
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 them to discover what they like
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age
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. On the one hand, some
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believe that teaching children
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 young is good for the
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brain
 to
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process
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 the brain is growing with the
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information
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 it is easy to get and understand so quickly.
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, Oxford University
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 shows that most
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information
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held
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yong
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young
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, many
people
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 consider
taching thier childern
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teaching their children
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young
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a young
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age
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 for the benefits of a lot of
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experience
.
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, discovering what you like
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young
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a young
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age
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 will help you understand yourself better and be aware of the world around you.
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, not all
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people
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 understand the
vauale
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value
 of doing what
you
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they
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 like
and
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there
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these
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people
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 never discover what they want
untill
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until
late
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age
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.
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, a recent study
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 that many
people
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lived
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happy
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happily
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 because they know what they love to do without too much
of
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a
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pressure on many levels. In conclusion, in my
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opinion
, the
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benefits
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 outweigh the
drawback
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drawbacks
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.
Although
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 not many
people
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 prefer to teach their children
young
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young,
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 they still do it without much
of
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apply
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thinking or
tried
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try
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 to help their children take the best way.

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task response
The essay tries to answer the question but it is not balanced. State both sides clearly and give your view with reasons and examples.
coherence cohesion
There is some structure, but ideas jump and linking words are weak. Use clear topic sentences and linking phrases to connect ideas.
structure
There is a clear plan: introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
development
An attempt to discuss both sides and give an opinion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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