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The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future.

The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future.
The map illustrated the
college
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’s current layout and
it’s
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its
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 anticipated changes in 2025
Overall
Linking Words
,
college
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 is planned to
modernize
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modernise
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, making students study in both modern and make it more compact
.
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ways.
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 Now, there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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number
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a number
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 of rooms in the
college
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.
Library
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The library
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 is adjacent to
reception
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the reception
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. Next to the reception, there is only one
classroom
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and
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, and
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the
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apply
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opposite
of
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apply
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the
classroom
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 is
Lunch
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the Lunch
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 area. There is a toilet between another
classroom
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 and
library
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the library
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. 3 classrooms are available
in
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on
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 the campus. Outside of the building, there is a narrow
t-shaped
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T-shaped
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 footpath. There is a car park on the left side of the layout.
Bus
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The bus
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 stop is in
the
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apply
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front of the
college
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. By 2025, the
t-shaped
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T-shaped
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 road is predicted to
remove
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be removed
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 completely
and
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, and
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 the parking area is supposed to expand
in
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apply
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2025.
While
Linking Words
college
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Linking Words
also is
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is also
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 predicted to
overcome
Verb problem
adapt
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 to the changes. The number of classrooms
are
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apply
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ought to increase by 4
and
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, and
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 all classrooms
predicted
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are predicted
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 to
locate
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be located
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 on the right side of the building. The entry is supposed to face the bus stop, creating opportunities for learners in the centre.
Shop
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The shop
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 is going to
build
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be built
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 next to the
classroom
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. There should be a toilet
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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between
of
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apply
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the shop and
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classroom
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the classroom
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, classroom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Structure
  • Design
  • Facilities
  • Expansion
  • Renovation
  • Development
  • Aesthetics
  • Functionality
  • Enhancement
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Adaptability
  • Capacity
  • Optimization
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