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Examine the advantages and disadvantages of working from home. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays
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 we are seeing that
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apply
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 studying at
home
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got
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has become
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 more common and useful than studying in an office or a place that belongs to the company.It contains some pros and cons.
The humanity
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 is influenced by
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 working
style
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style,
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that it
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which
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 makes them more comfortable,relaxed and a place
that
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where
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 you
cant
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can't
 gain any stress.But in
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contrast
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 you are getting rid of your group that you used to study with and the
socializing
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socialising
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 skills you have.
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, another thing is that you are connected to your family
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 you will not leave your house.
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addition
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addition,
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 it will
cause
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help
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 to clean the air pollution by not using the
veichles
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vehicles
.
Its
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It's
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 one of the most
talked
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talked-about
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issue
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issues
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 in the entire world
so
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, so
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 it will be versatile for that concern.
In
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 the other
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 there is no possibility to get any raise because you are not followed by your boss. And it can be hard
for connecting
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to connect
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 to documents,files or needed materials for the
bussiness
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business
.Another drawback
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of
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 working at
home
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 is the possible distractions that you have to handle
while
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 studying.
Because
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Since
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 of the virus since 2019 it influenced
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apply
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a
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apply
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society and spread all over the world. Many companies and schools adopted studying or working from
home
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 as a solution to keep their employees and students safe. Even though the pandemic is not as strong as before,
this
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 working style still continues today
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, and
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 it has become a part of modern life.
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, studying or working at
home
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 has both positive and negative sides. On one hand, it provides comfort, safety, family connection, and even environmental benefits.
On the other hand
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, it limits social skills, career opportunities, and focus. In the future, the best solution might be to create a balance between office and
home
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 working, so that people can enjoy the advantages of both worlds
while
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 reducing the disadvantages.

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structure
Use a clear plan. Have an intro, a part for good points, a part for bad points, and a final view.
content
Make your view on if the good points are more is clear. Say yes or no in intro and restate in end.
language
Use short, simple sentences. Use simple words. Check for spelling and gaps in grammar.
content
Shows balance by giving both sides and ends with a note to balance.
content
Mentions real acts like the virus and car use to back ideas.
structure
Has a clear end that asks for balance.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • Home office
  • Flexible schedule
  • Productivity
  • Cost-effective
  • Isolation
  • Burnout
  • Work-life balance
  • Technical disruptions
  • Commuting
  • Distractions
  • Connectivity
  • Collaboration
  • Autonomy
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