Nowadays in some countries children are given fewer responsibilities compared to the past. Some people believe it is a positive development while other argue otherwise. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Children
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in different countries are given fewer responsibilities compared
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to the
past.
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people think it is a positive
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development
because the
children
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can get a happier childhood
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, which
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is good for their
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growth
.
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, some people think that it may
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affect
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the development
for
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of
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thechildren
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the children
as they have less chance to develop their personal skills.
Children
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nowadays get more knowledge to take care
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themselves since they got
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common
sense from school and
also
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the
selfmenagement
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self-management
skills. That
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lets
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help
children
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stay in a comfortable
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environment
to study and grow up.
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However
,
children
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in the
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get not
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not get
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enough resources
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if they
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to maintain
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their
life or
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change
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the
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better living
enviornment
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environment
, they
must make
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had to do
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it by themselves
by
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, by
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doing many
hand works
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hours of manual labour
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like farming.
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they can
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grow up
for
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doing those hand works, it
maybe
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may be
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a bit
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monotonous
that they can only know one single skill in their life. As there
are
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enough support from the families for the
children
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nowadays, every
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children
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child
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get
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gets
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a
chace
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chance
to learn
from
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in
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schools
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school
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.
Besides
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learning the academic
knowlege
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knowledge
, they can
aslo
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also
learn the social communication skills from doing
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a group
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project,
getting
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gaining
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more
talent
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talents
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from different
subject
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subjects
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such
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as chemistry, physical education and art. Those opportunities were given by the Government or
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the school
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and
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, and
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student
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students
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can get
it
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them
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easily. That's why some people will think that
children
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will waste the chance and take it for nothing. But at least they got development for their whole person and virously. In conclusion,
although
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children
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getting
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everything nowadays easily, it will not reduce
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their
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responsibilities
to
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apply
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them
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apply
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. They need to learn
selfcontrolling
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self-control
, time management and making many
choice
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choices
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during
they
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their
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growth. It is
also
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a big lesson in our
life
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lives
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. We should be more
openminded
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open-minded
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and
excecpt
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accept
the
changing
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change
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. Making good use of technology to improve
ourselve
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ourselves
and make
the
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a
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better living environment
ourselves
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for ourselves
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.

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structure
Plan your work. Start with your view, then give one paragraph for each view, then end.
language use
Use simple and common word spell. Check simple words first and fix big mistakes.
content
Give one or two clear examples from life. Explain how they show the point.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas. Like and, but, also, however.
content
The essay talks about two sides of the topic.
content
The writer uses a real idea about life in past and now.

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