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Some people think that the best way to solve the problem of air pollution in cities is to increase the cost of vehicle fuel. others think that different measure should be taken. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone
think
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thinks
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 that the increased vehicle
fuel
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cost
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 is the solution
of
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to
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air
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pollution
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 in cities,
while
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 others believe that
the
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apply
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different steps should be taken. In my opinion,
improve
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improving
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fuel
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cost
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costs
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 may apply everywhere in the state and may
incrsease
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increase
expensiveness
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expenses
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, so
others
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other
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 rules should be more beneficial.
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 with,
people
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 think that
improve
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improved
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fuel
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cost
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costs
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 may lead to
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a redcution
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redcution
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reduction
 of
air
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pollution
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 in large cities.
Due to
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this
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,
improvement
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an improvement
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 in
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cost
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the cost
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 of gas may apply towards all
the
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apply
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state
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states
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, including
countryside
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the countryside
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,
these
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which
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 may
unfair
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be unfair
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 for
people
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 living in green areas.
Moreover
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,
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this
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these
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 decisions may create
negative
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a negative
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 impact,
tansportation
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transportation
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cost
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costs
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 of goods may increase,
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this
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which
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 can result
into dearness
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in the dearth
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 of food and other products.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done by Western Sydney University which says increase
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fuel
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in fuel
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cost
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costs
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 can improve the
cost
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 of daily needs, because
of
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apply
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transportation
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cost
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costs
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goes high
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increase
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, and
impact
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has
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very
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 little
on
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impact on
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air
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pollution
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.
On the other hand
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, some humans believe that different steps should be taken to improve
air
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 quality.
Aa
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 a result, the government may reduce taxes on
electrocnic
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electric
 vehicles and encourage
people
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 to
by
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buy
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 more
EV
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EVs
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,
the reduce
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reducing
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the
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apply
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fuel
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 demand,
pollution
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 and
help
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helping
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 to improve
air
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standards
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quality
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.
Ministry
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The Ministry
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also
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 help citizens to use more solar energy to charge
the
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apply
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vehicles and for domestic uses.
Furthermore
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, the authorities may apply even
odd
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 method for cars to reduce
emission
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emissions
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 in cities.
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in
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In
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 addition,
government
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the government
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 can create rules for industries and hotels in order to reduce their emission.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which mentioned vehicle emits only 20% of carbon dioxide in
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air
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the air
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,
while
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 industries create
more
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apply
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around 60%, so the ministry may apply rules to them
for
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to
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 create
better
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a better
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 environment. In conclusion, if
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cost
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the cost
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 of petrol
increase
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increases
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then
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, then
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 the transportation
cost
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 can go up, so it leads to
expensivness
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expense
,
i
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I
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 am convinced that the government should take action on factories and may encourage
people
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 to use EV and solar energy
sorces
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sources
.

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structure
Plan your essay. Each paragraph should have one main idea and a clear link to the question.
language
Use simple grammar. Keep sentences short and clear.
content
Give better examples. Choose real and easy examples that fit your point.
structure
You state both views and give your own view at the end.
content
You try to give examples to back up ideas.
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