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The diagram below illustrate how recycled paper is made summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below illustrate how recycled paper is made summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of recycling used
paper
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 into new
paper
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 products.
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, the diagram consists of four main stages, beginning with making pulp from wastepaper and ending with the process of recycling
paper
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 rolls. In the first phase, used
paper
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 is delivered to the recycling factory where it stays on top of the conveyor belt and is transported to a special chemical
water
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 process, where it makes pulp , that all non-recycled papers are being cleaned. Afterwards,
this
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 pulp proceeds to a large sieve where it is filtered, after which the mass is soaked in a container with
water
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 and soap, that procedure removes the ink remaining from used
paper
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.
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, dirty
water
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 is pumped out from
this
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 container through a specially designed pipe, during the
stage
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 of the clean substance is blown to yet another container with
water
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 and chemicals to undergo the final cleaning
stage
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. In the ultimate phase, after
water
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 substance blown to another box, there is a one-line
stage
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 where the chemical is processed with
water
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 poured into that line
stage
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, and there will be a conveyor belt like
at the first
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stage
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. After that ,
water
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 goes from heated rollers , which can easily produce recycled
paper
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 .

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, water, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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