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Nowadays women are having children at a much later age than previous generations. Do you think this a positive or negative thing? Discuss both sides.

In
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this
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modern times,
women
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 are having
offsprings
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offspring
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 much later
age
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 which is influenced by both social and financial stability.
This
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 ideology puts a
negetive
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negative
 impact on
the
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society
as well as
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 on the general
wellbeing
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well-being
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 of
women
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.
To begin
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with
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with,
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due to
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hugely
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modernification
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modernisation
 of the world, woman
is
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are
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 now very much concerned about their career in general with financial stability. They often focus on their goal rather than planning
about
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a family, resulting in
pregencies
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pregnancies
 at a very late
age
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.
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 of
concieving
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conceiving
this
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 late of her
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age
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late age
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,
woman
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a woman
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 can suffer some serious complications. A Harvard Study done in 2017 shows that the rate of low birth weight
new borns
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newborns
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 has increased
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subsequently
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more than in
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last
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the last
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 10 years
due to
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women
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concieving
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conceiving
 at
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a late
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late
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later
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 stage. Getting pregnant at
the
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a
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 late stage is
also
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 associated with more neonatal deaths and complications.
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, the female population has
biological
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a biological
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 period after which they can not get pregnant any more.
Thus
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, at the very late stage
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women
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, women
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 require a lot of ovulation induction drugs to facilitate the
pregnency
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pregnancy
. In conclusion, it can be said that
women
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 should not wait to the extremes of their biological
age
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 for
pregnency
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pregnancy
, as it can cause both maternal and neonatal complications
even
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, even
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 death of either one.

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task
The essay does not show both sides as the prompt asks. Add a paragraph that gives a positive view and a balanced view, with a clear stance at the end.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show flow between ideas. Try to put one clear main idea in each paragraph and then add a short example.
structure
There is a clear start and end to the piece.
coherence
There are some linking phrases like 'To begin with' and 'As a result' to connect ideas.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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