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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people like to travel outside of their countries. Others would rather travel to the tourist spots in their own country first before traveling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

2.The obvious aim was to disclose the activity of the G protein αq subunit. Researchers did
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 by mixing its purified form with AlF4-, effectively switching it on. The text
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 notes that “Assays contained αq (18ng) +/- AlF4- and all reactions contained (18ng) of PI-PLC”. Noteworthy, the findings were represented in experiments with various numbers of preparations.
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, the aqueous phase was removed and measured by scintillation spectrometry. Indeed, other methods
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 as Boling, trypsin, NEM, and antibodies, have played an important part in disclosing the presence of αq’s proteins.

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task response
The text about travel does not fit the task. To raise task response, state a clear view and give reasons.
task response
Use a simple plan: intro that states your choice, body that gives the reason with a short example, and a short conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Make ideas fit into one main idea per paragraph. Use linking words like first, also, but, so.
coherence cohesion
Make the order of ideas clear. Start with the main idea, then add detail.
coherence cohesion
Keep to simple words; avoid long phrases that may mix up.
detail
The text uses specific facts and numbers.
cohesion
The writing uses some linking words to move ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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