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Some people claim that many things that children are taught at school are a waste of time. Other people argue that everything that children study at school is useful at sometime. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

Children
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 are often encouraged to study curriculum
subjectes
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subjects
 for their
overall
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 growth.
However
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, there is a debate regarding the kind of topics taught in schools. Should
children
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 only learn for educational purposes
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apply
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also
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 gain real-life
skills
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? In my opinion, both categories of studies are equally important for
children
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's
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development
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. On one hand, critics argue that many
schools
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school
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 subjects are outdated or irrelevant.
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, advanced mathematics or science topics require dedicated effort and consistent practice,
may
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and may
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 not be directly applied in careers.
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, school time can be focused on learning
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practical
skills
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 like communication, financial literacy or technology. Ultimately, students would be prepared in advance for their modern workplace.
On the other hand
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, supporters of school topics highlight the long-term benefits of studying diverse subjects. Mathematics
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 critical thinking and problem-solving
skills
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, history teaches cultural and social development, and literature enhances creativity. Even though
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 these
subjectes
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subjects
 would not
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 professionally,
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they
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helps
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help
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child's
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 intellectual growth and personality.
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, exposure to academic courses allows
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one to
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 find hidden talents, which may guide their future careers. In conclusion,
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 some school subjects may appear less practical, they still play a crucial role in developing essential
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 and perspectives.
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, I believe that both areas of study eventually foster the holistic development of
children
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.

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structure
Plan your ideas first. Make a short intro that says what you will talk about and a plan for the body.
grammar
Use short, calm sentences. Check for big mistakes in grammar and fix them.
content
Give more real and exact examples to back your view. Link each idea to your point.
strength
The essay shows a clear view and talks about both sides.
structure
There is a good frame with intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste
  • time
  • useful
  • learn
  • school
  • study
  • teacher
  • student
  • lesson
  • topic
  • subject
  • read
  • write
  • count
  • number
  • math
  • science
  • life
  • job
  • work
  • future
  • skill
  • think
  • plan
  • solve
  • idea
  • point
  • reason
  • example
  • discuss
  • agree
  • disagree
  • change
  • better
  • important
  • necessary
  • on the one hand
  • on the other hand
  • however
  • therefore
  • in my view
  • real life
  • hands-on
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