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The bar chart provides information about the number of films produced in five countries

The bar chart provides information about the number of films produced in five countries
The chart
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrates
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 the proportion of
making
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apply
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films
in
Verb problem
made in
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 five countries and in
three
Correct article usage
the three
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 years from 2007 to 2009. The data is given by numbers
Overall
Linking Words
, In A
country
Use synonyms
, the production of
the
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apply
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movies was
in
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at
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peak
Correct pronoun usage
its peak
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 in 3 years,
while
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C
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 state showed
a
Correct article usage
the
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 lowest rate. In 2007, A
country
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resulted
Verb problem
recorded
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a
Correct article usage
the
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 highest indication. Almost 90 films
published
Verb problem
were published
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in
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apply
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this
Linking Words
 year.
While
Linking Words
B
Correct word order
country B
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country
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 was much less
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
country
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 A, 50 movies
established
Verb problem
were established
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.
Country
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C
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 and E showed
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 result
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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D
Correct word order
Country D
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country
Use synonyms
 was much more, 8 and 15
respectively
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, respectively
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 In 2008, some countries
faced to
Verb problem
experienced
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a
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apply
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growth
,
Punctuation problem
.
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 A
country
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 remained steady at 85, B
country
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 increased slightly to 52, countries D and E
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 the same at 10, but
C
Use synonyms
country
Use synonyms
 showed an increase
by
Change preposition
in
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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films to 15. By 2009, all
counties
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countries
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 had a rapid growth
,
Punctuation problem
.
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 B depicted the
enormously
Replace the word
enormous
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 boost to 70,
A
Correct word choice
and A
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country
Use synonyms
 plummeted to 80 drastically.
C
Use synonyms
country
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 almost reached 20, both D and E increased unexpectedly to 13

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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