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Band 3

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some experiences seem unbearable at the
time
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 when we go through
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however
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,
it
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they
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turns
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turn
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 out to be a great lesson that we should learn.
While
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,
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apply
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 it is not
to
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apply
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possible to understand and tolerate
every
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everyone
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time
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, I totally agree with
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 statement.
Life
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 is not stable and it
serves always
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always serves
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 some difficulties. Sometimes facing
with
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apply
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them is not an easy job. At these times, we
focuse
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focus
 on the challenge and put on a lot of effort to tackle. The solutions that have been found for it
,
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apply
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leads
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lead
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 to create another solution for different problems.
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, it is true to say that facing
with
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apply
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challenges mostly
give
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gives
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 us
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life
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lifetime
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time
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 experiences.
For example
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, I
have been
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was
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 defrauded when I had my first online shop. It was a horrible
experince
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experience
 because
i
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I
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 have lost so much money
,
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;
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however
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,
this
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 made me conscientious about fraud
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 have not had
such
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 an
experince
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experience
 again. I believe, facing some challenges and getting lessons from them is
the
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apply
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life
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 itself. People who have suffered a disease before
gets
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get
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 a lesson about the importance of taking care of themselves
or
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, or
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 individuals who
had
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have had
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 an accident, be more
carefull
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careful
 when they are in traffic.
According to
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 these examples, difficulties make us well-prepared and
consciencous
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conscious
. In conclusion, difficulties are not only horrible things we have to go through but
also
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life
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lifetime
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time
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 experiences and
equipments
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equipment
 for fighting with another one.
Therefore
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, we should accept and continue
instead
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 of focusing on the hardness.

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language
Fix grammar and spelling; use simple, correct sentence forms.
coherence
Use clearer links between ideas. Add simple connectors to guide the reader.
task response
Add more examples or details to back up ideas.
language
Check common word forms (for example 'conscious' and 'experience').
task response
Clear stance and basic idea about the topic.
coherence
Some support for ideas with a real-life example.
structure
Basic essay layout with intro, body and conclusion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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