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Band 4

Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. fo whot extent do you agree or disagree?

it
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It
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 is interesting
ask
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to ask
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,
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becouse
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because
 it is
importan
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important
the
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to consider the
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 context
,
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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 when you
do
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apply
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see a lot of
trees
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 far
your
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from your
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town
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town,
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is
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it's
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 like
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farm
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a farm
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its
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, its
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 ok for that
reason
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reason,
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is
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it's
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 easier
do
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to do
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 it
, but
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. But
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 when you
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life
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live
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on
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in
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the
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a
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 big
city
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,
this
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one
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 to have
a
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apply
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more
restriction
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restrictions
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becouse
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because
 we don't have places for that.
However
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 when you do like
trees
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, river, animals etc you need
life
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 far the
city
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, you think in another
life
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 more relaxing and safe, i my opinion it is a good idea
life
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 in
farm
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 o similar, i abosluty love
this
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life
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, but i know in the
city
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 it is the place for lookin job, study carrer, big companies, the administrative goverment, and other more historical places,
this
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one
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 it is good but you need like traffic, noises, a lot people, and the most important don see
trees
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. The reason
clear
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is clear
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 for
that is
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in
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that
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 the
city
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need
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needs
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 space for more
street
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streets
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,
bilds
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buildings
,
parkings
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parking
, etc, and if you want
go
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to go
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the
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to the
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 park, in just
one
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 place you
look
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can see
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 that. The other hand, i my opinion it is important more plans on the
city
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,
becouse
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, a lot of people working, study, and need free time for yourselves, and for you healt,
for instance
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 when you want go to the
farm
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, you feel pease, relax, bring clear air, and look a loot tress everywere, it amazing
this
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 feel.
However
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, it
the
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is the
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best
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most
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 important
you
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thing you
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 do like for your
life
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,
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becouse
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because
the
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apply
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bouth
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both
 places its ok for
every people
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everyone
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, but just
one
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it
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apply
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is
importan
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important
 for you
, in
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. In
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 my
case
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case,
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i
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I
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am
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apply
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prefer
life
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in
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on
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Use synonyms
farm
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a farm
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than
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to
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Use synonyms
city
Correct article usage
a city
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, it is more
confortable
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comfortable
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 enjoy
when get
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getting
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 up in the morning and
look
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looking at
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sun
Correct article usage
the sun
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day
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apply
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, animals,
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trees
Correct word choice
and trees
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it
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. It
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 is
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a beatiful
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beatiful
Correct your spelling
beautiful
live
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life
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.

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task
Plan your answer first. Say your view in one line at the start.
coherence
Use simple links like and, but, also. Keep sentences short.
content
You write about life in farm and city and care about air and trees.
content
You show some links between life, work, and place.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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