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Writing Samples
Band 2

It is important for all towns and cities to have large public spaces such as squares and parks. Do you agree or disagree?

In
modern
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the modern
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 era, there
is
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are
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 a lot of
parks
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 and squares in towns or cities. In my opinion, the
parks
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 have
impact
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an impact
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for
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on
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 both mental and physical health .
Therefore
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, many
of
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apply
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teenagers and young
people
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 become
open minded
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 how
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the important
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important
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importance
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 to do exercise. and
also
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 squares and
parks
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helpful
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are helpful
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to
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for
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 walking or running .
However
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,
people
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 how interested
about
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in
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 exercise . will know how important to have places
you
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where you
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 can do sports
there
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apply
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.
at
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At
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 the same time
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parks
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, parks
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giving
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give
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 the city more benefits ,
such
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 as
reduce using
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reducing the use of
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 cars or
train
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trains
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.
Moreover
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, most
of
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apply
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people
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 will have a healthy lifestyle to walking around the streets. Which is helping the
stoes
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states
 and economy to develop.
and
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And
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 many
people
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 will start using public transport .
Additionally
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, I once read
article
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an article
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shows
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that shows
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 70% of
people
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 are fit because they don't walk .
To conclude
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,
parks
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 and squares improve
the
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a
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health
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healthy
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 lifestyle . And give the city Beautiful views.

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planning
Plan your essay first. Write one clear idea per paragraph. Use a simple plan: intro, two or three reasons, then a short conclusion.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and to connect ideas. Examples: first, next, also, but, so, because.
language
Check grammar and spellings. Use short sentences and common words. Repeat key ideas to keep track.
content
The writer shows a view that parks can help health.
structure
Some links to walking and transport are mentioned.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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