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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that the government should spend money to create more art such as paintings and statues in cities to make them a better place to live to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that
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prefers
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prefer
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government
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the government
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should
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apply
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spend
money
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 to create more
art
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 ,in
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 report I will talk about it and
tould
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tell
 why I see that I agree. Creating
art
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 that makes cities be more beoutefull
place
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 to live not only that colors make
people
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 fell so happy and calm and that will make a towns
people
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 more friendly to each others ,
art
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 it is like speaking but in the deferent way
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 when the
government
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 story
art
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 and pay for that it is like they are sporting
people
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 who love painting or crating things
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 hand made that makes them think out of th box and be smarter than others and makes the life wonderful
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 to live. That why I agree that the
government
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 should pay or spending
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 to lets
people
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 creating arts and painting
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 statues and I see that think really will make it better
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 to live and that what I really see at the real life the
government
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 makes some time challenge
art
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 and they but a
price
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 for the winner and that lets
people
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 feel more excited to win and get the
price
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 the most of time the
price
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 it be
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 in King Faisal Universety for national day they create a talented challenge
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 there's three winners and deferent
price
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 that things not only helping the uneversity achtevety it is
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 helping students be more creative and get out of the study side and makes them fell more sported and that their
art
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 and their aideas it is really seen that will lets their positive energy in highest level and make they pation about continues and be more helpful .
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 why sporting from
government
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 and spending
money
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 on
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art
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sports
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 and
others
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art
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 makes
people
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 and critics
grou
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grouse
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make
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makes
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 it
better
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a better
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place
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 to live .

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep that view in mind all through the essay.
task response
Make each paragraph hold one main idea with a short clear sentence at the top and add a small idea to explain it.
task response
Names or facts can be used to show a point, but keep them simple and real.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas fit together, such as also, but, and so.
coherence
Organize as: short intro, 2 or 3 body parts each with one idea, short ending.
idea
The writer shows a view on how art work can be good for a city.
language use
There are some clear ideas about art and life in a city.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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