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Writing Samples
Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a prediction on a sunset in paper-based reading source usage in the
foreseen
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 future based on their buying patterns. I strongly agree with
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 assumption since printed documents impose not only financial but
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 environmental costs
to
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 us. Relying on physical sources is an income-wasting approach for achieving data and
knowledge
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. We live in digital era that every desired
knowledge
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 resource can be accessable with strinking fewer cost, without need to inperson shop and its specific transportation caosts, and capability of storage millions of sources in the most systemize and convenient shape with out need to bookcases or huge rooms, just in a tiny piece of digital storage and nations tend to rely on
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 cheapest and most strightforward method to achieving
knowledge
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 and data. Relying on digital sources
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 supports our planet's resources more sustainably , and
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 people are environmentally conscious
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 sustainability boundaries tend to be a rule for many industries. Production process of tangible documents depends on resource extraction and carbon emission ,
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, they offer a lot of paper waste , and all is happening at the expense of destroying our environment. To be clear, publishing a 300-page book is associated with about 7.5 kg CO₂ emitted, around 300 litres of water used and contributes to deforestation and chemical pollution. So it is obvious that
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environmentally
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 harmful approach will be disappreared in
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 future.
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 , relying on printed documents is a financially expensive and environmentally harmful method for achieving data and
knowledge
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 , and conscious individuals won't allow it to continue.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write to keep ideas clear; make a quick plan with three parts: introduction, body, conclusion.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one main idea and use simple linking words to show order or view, for example: also, but, however, for example.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar; use easy words and check errors like in-person, cost, disappeared.
position
You state a clear view and give reasons tied to money and the environment.
reasoning
You try to use facts about CO2 and water use to back your view.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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