It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?

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may think that
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travelling
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abroad and being exposed to other cultures
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can make them more understanding and accepting of
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. I completely disagree with that idea.
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I think that there is no need to travel to other countries to be able to
mix
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with other nationalities. You can live in your own country and
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with
people
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from different backgrounds.
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,
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in Kuwait
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, there
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are more than one hundred and forty nationalities who
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settled
down in
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tiny country. I personally deal with
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on a daily basis at my work, without the need
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to travel
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.
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, I'm definitely sure that anyone can
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can
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with foreigners not just at work, but
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out side
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outside
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their work environment
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malls and gyms.
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, I believe that travelling won't have the ability to make anyone more tolerant and understanding
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others
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.
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behaviors
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depends
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depend
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mainly on your own personality and character.
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, I used to know
people
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who lived abroad for a
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couple
of years and they still lack the ability
of accepting
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to accept
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and
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with
people
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from other cultures and religions. I agree that the skill of understanding
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is gained at a young age and influenced by the environment
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grown up
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. If you have lived in an acceptable and friendly community, you would have definitely gained those
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. In conclusion, it is clear to see that there are several reasons that support my opinion that
traveling
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won't be able to make
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people
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more understanding
to
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others
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. It is obvious that anyone can
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with other nationalities
at
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in
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his
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their
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country.
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, the community ones
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grown up will affect the
abilities
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ability
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of accepting
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to accept
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others
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and
understanding
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understand
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them.

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coherence
Keep your view steady and do not move your mind from one side to the other.
position
The view is clear: travel alone is not the main path to tolerance.
content
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