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The graph below gives information about U.S government spending on research between 1980 and 2008

The graph below gives information about U.S government spending on research between 1980 and 2008
The line graph illustrates data about the U.S government's spending on research from 1980 to 2008
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, health has recorded the highest amount of spending over the period, Space, Energy, General Science , and Other ; all these have fluctuated Health from 1980 to 1984 has fallen from around 8
billion
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 to almost 6
billion
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. From 1984 to 2004, the
expenditure
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 jumped to about 23
billion
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$ ,
then
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 declined to about 18
billion
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$
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. However
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however
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 Space
overall
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, there was an upward trend in the
Expenditure
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 over the period from 1980 to 1984, which stayed the same ,
then
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 from 1988 to 2008 rose from 5
billion
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$ to almost 10
billion
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$ From 1980 to 1992, the
Expenditure
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 remained at 5
billion
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 ,
then
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 , from 1992 to 1996, has rose to around 7
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billion$
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billion
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then
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 it fell from 2000 to 2004 to 5
billion
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. From 2004 to 2008, has rose to about 7
billion
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.
In addition
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 , General Science, and the Other over the period, the
Expenditure
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 fluctuated.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • funding levels
  • government expenditure
  • trend analysis
  • budget allocation
  • inflation-adjusted dollars
  • historic highs/lows
  • research grants
  • public investment
  • financial resources
  • sector-specific spending
  • economic downturn
  • national priorities
  • scientific advancement
  • fiscal policy
  • economic stimulus
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