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The chart below shows the amount of money in billions of dollars spent on international tourism by people from seven different countries in 2011 and 2012.

The chart below shows the amount of money in billions of dollars spent on international tourism by people from seven different countries in 2011 and 2012.
The given bar chart compares seven different countries in terms of how much money (in billions of
dollars
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) was spent on international tourism between 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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, China recorded the highest expenditure on overseas travel,
while
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 Canada spent the least amount during both years. In 2011, Chinese tourists spent about 65
billion
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dollars
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, and
figure
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the figure
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 rose dramatically to nearly 100
billion
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dollars
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 in 2012.
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, Germany had the highest spending in 2011, at around 82
billion
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dollars
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,
althought
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although
 it fell slightly to about 80
billion
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dollars
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 a year later. Meanwhile, the figure for Canada stood at the same
level
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level,
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that
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which
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 was about 18
billion
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dollars
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. Spending in the UK, the US and Russia increased over the period, with British tourists spending more than those from the US and Russia.
By contrast
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, people in France spent almost the same amount from 2011 to 2012
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at
roughtly
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roughly
 40
billion
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dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • money
  • spend
  • spent
  • spending
  • billions
  • year
  • 2011
  • 2012
  • country
  • countries
  • tourism
  • travel
  • increase
  • rose
  • grew
  • decrease
  • fell
  • fall
  • change
  • more
  • less
  • highest
  • lowest
  • than
  • overall
  • pattern
  • notable
  • big
  • small
  • high
  • low
  • different
  • and
  • but
  • so
  • then
  • also
  • even
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