Some people say that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Loving the environment is whose responsibility remains a heated debate.Some human support that it should be
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a responsibility
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by
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the
government
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,
while
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opponents think it should be everyone's
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.I believe it should be every
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individual's
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responsibility. First,protecting
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the envirnment
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envirnment
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environment
needs everybody's effort.
People
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is
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are
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the
executor
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executors
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when the
government
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implementation of
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policies.If
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the government's
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government's
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government
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push some
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eco-friendly
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policies
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instances
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,pay
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the
schopping
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shopping
bag, go plastic-free,three-colour recycling bin.....but
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just neglect it,
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noting
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nothing
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will change.
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just still using many plastic things and wasting food.
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,it is
significiant
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significant
for everyone to save the earth.Not only
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should the government
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government
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should care
it
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about it
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,but
also
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people
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actively
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should actively
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cooperate with the
government
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layout
Your essay has a clear view that people should take care of the land. Use a plan for each essay. Start with a short intro, then 2 or 3 body points, and end with a short sum up.
grammar
Use plain and correct words. Many spelling mistakes slow the reader. Check care, environment, responsibility, policy, recycle.
content
Add more clear ideas how people can help at home and at work. Give one or two strong examples of what they do.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas. Words like also, but, so, yet help you go from point to point.
style
Make short, clear sentences. Do not run long lines. This helps your score.
content
The writer has a clear view that one person can help.
content
The essay shows some real policy ideas like fee on plastic bag.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • government
  • responsibility
  • protect
  • environment
  • laws
  • regulations
  • pollution
  • companies
  • programs
  • nature
  • reserves
  • wildlife
  • clean
  • energy
  • projects
  • reduce
  • climate
  • change
  • individuals
  • actions
  • recycling
  • plastic
  • water
  • difference
  • awareness
  • issues
  • educating
  • inspire
  • choices
  • public
  • transport
  • carbon
  • footprint
  • global
  • warming
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