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The internet has made a huge difference in modern society. It changed the world in many ways. Give both advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

The
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 has made a huge difference in modern society. It changed the world in many ways.
This
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of the
internet
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. The
internet
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 has multiple excellent advantages .
First,
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it is amazing for educational purposes.
For example
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, students can search
about
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for
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 any topic they need.
Also
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, they can use it for solving homework and projects.
Moreover
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, it has unlimited resources for different subjects like science, math and art.
As a result
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, students can get
an
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outstanding information .
Second,
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the
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has
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plays
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 a great role
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in
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 finding jobs. So ,
people
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 can seek
for
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a job even outside their country.
However
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,
people
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also
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 may have online or overtime jobs to improve their income.
Finally
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, it has
wonderful
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a wonderful
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 way
for
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 communication .
Due to
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the large number of
applications
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 so it provides several options for communication. There are many
applications
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such
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 as
,
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 Snapchat, Facebook and
Tiktok
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TikTok
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.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 can
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chat
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 with others even
in
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over
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 long
distance
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distances
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 and in simple and easy methods.
On the other hand
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, there are many disadvantages
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internet
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the internet
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.
First,
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it can waste your time.
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,some
people
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 it for long periods and they can’t control themselves. Because of
,
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apply
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 unbelievable numbers of
applications
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 and videos
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people
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, people
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 can’t stop themselves .
Also
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, others forget their
works
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work
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 and spend the whole day watching videos and chatting without realising the time.
Second,
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spend
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spending
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 too much time on
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internet
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the internet
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 can lead
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to
 several health problems.
In addition
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, there are a lot of physical and psychological issues caused by internal
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factors.
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 As some
people
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 compare their own
life
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lives
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 with what they see on social media or others imitate what they watch.
Finally
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, as some
applications
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asked
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 to share your personal information,
people
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maybe
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may
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 face some
hachkers
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hackers
.
Moreover
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, hackers can use your personal data in negative
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ways
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. Like, they usually use your address or location to harm or steal from you.
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, can share your private photos or videos
in
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wrong
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the wrong
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 purposes
or
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, or
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 they can make
photoshop
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Photoshop
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 for your photos . So everyone should take it seriously and be careful. In conclusion, it is completely clear to see that
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the internet
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.

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grammar
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lexical
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conclusion
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strength
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strength
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strength
There is a simple conclusion at the end.

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