The chart below gives information about how many Europeans citizens of different age groups who frequently went to gym between 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about how many Europeans citizens of different age groups who frequently went to gym between 1990 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about how many Europeans citizens of different age groups who frequently went to gym between 1990 and 2010.
The line graph compares the four
age
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groups of European
people
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who regularly went to
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gym
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the gym
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in 1990 and 2010.
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, it was clear that
the
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people
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of 24-33
years
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old were the major group
to
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at
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the
gym
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. The youngest
age
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had significantly changed during the two decades. Both
34
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the 34
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-43
years
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old and
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the 44
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-53
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old were the lowest percentage attending the
gym
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. In 1990, the teenagers and the dominant
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labour
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force had a similar proportion
around
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of around
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16%, which
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continued
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the same trend in the next four
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.
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, the
middle
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age
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and the elderly remained relatively stable until 1994. From 1996 to 2010, the
age
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between
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group between
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24 and 33 rose drastically from 20% to 26%, which was
also
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the primary group to participate in the
gym
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. The youngest
people
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who went to the
gym
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climbed rapidly, reaching a peak of 25% in 2006
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however
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it declined slightly, with 18% in 2010.
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,
34
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those 34
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-43
years
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old obviously grew, at 10%. The older
people
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maintained the same level during
this
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period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, gym, years with synonyms.
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