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Some people believe that children should learn science in school. Others think that it is not necessary to include science in general education. Do you agree or disagree with this statement ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In recent years, more and more parents argue whether their children should study
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 or not. I completely agree that kids need to learn
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. On the one hand, some people think pupils need to study
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. There are many reasons to explain it.
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, the
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 has professional teachers,
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 they can learn correct knowledge about
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, when students study and encounter difficult questions, they can ask teachers instantly.
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, there are many resources in
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 as
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 laboratories, where children can do any experiments which they want, and a natural environment, which teachers can teach directly.
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, learning
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 expands our knowledge, and we can discuss the problems with classmates.
On the other hand
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, other people believe that
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 is not an important course in
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. Because
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 is not much more useful than other subjects in the future, like math or
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. Only certain professions need it,
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, the scientists and researchers who work in a lab or any
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 that explores the
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. What’s more, some adults consider that kids can learn
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 at home,
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special books or videos to teach. In my opinion, I regard
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 as a necessary lesson for students in
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, because many useful resources can be taken. In summary, children learn
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 has become the primary issue in modern society. I think studying
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 has more advantages than disadvantages for pupils.

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content
State a clear view at the start and stay with it.
structure
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and link ideas with simple words.
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Give more real examples from daily life or school to show why science helps.
language
Check grammar and spelling; use capital letters for proper names like Chinese.
structure
End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
position
The writer gives a clear view that science should be taught.
technique
The essay uses a compare idea with on the one hand / on the other hand.
content
Reason is given for why science is useful.
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