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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought in supermarkets in 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought in supermarkets in 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008.
the
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The
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 graphs illustrate the percentages of
food
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 and
goods
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 which bought in markets in 3 different European countries from 1988
and2008
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to and2008
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. The data is given
by
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as
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percentage
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a percentage
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Overall
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,
Country
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 1 showed a higher rate in
goods
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while
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, while
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country
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Country
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 3 represented the lowest rate among other countries
in
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In
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 1998,
Country
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 2 was the king of
the
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apply
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both units, 25 and 40
respectively
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, respectively
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.
While
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Country
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 1 showed almost 20 by purchasing
goods
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,
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however
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apply
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food
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 was twice less
from
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as
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 the
goods
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, 10
percent
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per cent
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. The proportion of
goods
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 bought in supermarkets in
Country
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 3 in 1998
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,
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around 10% was roughly double that of
food
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 purchases, which stood at just 5%. By 2008, both
field
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fields
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 had a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 growth .
Country
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 1 reached the
higher
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highest
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 percentages
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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amidst
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across
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all sectors.
Goods
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was
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were
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 20% more
from
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than
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foods
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food
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which
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, which
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goods
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apply
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depicted 60%.
Country
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 2 was way more than
Country
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 3 , 30 and 12 by
food
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, 50 and 10 in
goods
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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