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It was predicted that people living in the twenty-first century would have more free time than ever before because of improvements in technology. To what extent has this prediction come true?

Technology
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 during the twenty-first century has been developing continuously
and
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 it has helped many. These techs can vary from home
use
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up
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to industrial
use
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. I believe that it has done benefits to
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human
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humans
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but
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 it would not grant more free time than ever before.
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 with, techs in the modern world have different uses and abilities
which
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 depend on how the user wants to
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it
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them
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.
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, a person can
use
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 computers to program and research,
while
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 computers give us the ability to program,
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 cannot be automatically controlled.
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, requiring a human being to operate it,
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the same
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 goes for any other tech devices. Most techs still need the user to control or command it
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 without humans, technologies would have been useless.
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, in the past
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technology
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 was not as developed as it is now. Humans are required to do all the handiwork.
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 as doing research, drawing, searching for information or contacting others, most of these actions can be done easily right now with the
use
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 of
technology
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. Still, human interventions are mandatory in order to finish those tasks.
Technology
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 does not give us more time
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 it assists us so that we can focus on other things rather than having to do every single task by ourselves. In conclusion,
technology
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 can help us in many activities
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 simple tasks
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to high-complexity tasks. But
,
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 human presence is still crucial in order to finish those missions.
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Thus
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,
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giving
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 us easier ways to complete it.

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task response
The essay needs a clearer view on how far the idea is true. State a main claim about the extent and give more proof to back it.
coherence
Link ideas in a clear order. Use simple links like first, then, also, but, finally to guide the reader.
grammar
Fix run-on sentences and use proper punctuation. Check comma use and make short, clear sentences where needed.
lexical
Use plain words and avoid rare or new words like 'techs'. Prefer 'technology' or 'devices' when possible.
structure
The essay shows a clear view and keeps a main idea from start to end.
content
Examples show how tech can help and how humans stay needed.
coherence
There are paragraphs that talk about both sides of the idea.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • leisure
  • automation
  • blurred boundaries
  • always-on culture
  • advancements
  • smart appliances
  • chores
  • responsibilities
  • leisure activities
  • social media
  • video games
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