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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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 suggest that
university
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education
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 should be free for all students.
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, there are contrasting views regarding
this
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 matter as there are numerous advantages and disadvantages to the issue.
This
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 paragraph aims to discuss both views and give the writer's opinions. Free
university
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education
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 has many advantages.
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, free
education
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 means that it is more accessible for
people
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: rural, impoverished
people
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for example
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. Since
education
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 is more accessible, students who were unable to attend
university
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 before will now be given more opportunities to show their potential.
This
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 in turn will ensure that they have a job in the future and will reduce the crime rates of formerly uneducated
people
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. These
people
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 will be future prospects that will contribute to the economic development of the country.
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, there are several disadvantages to free
university
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education
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. The school will have to pay for basic
expenses
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such
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 as salary for professors and other working
people
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 and
further
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expenses
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such
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 as maintainance costs and cleaning
expenses
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. All of the added up
expenses
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 will put a huge financial burden on the school and force universities to limit their spending.
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 will result in underpaid professors, and in turn, the school will attract much less experienced
people
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. In conclusion, I mostly disagree with the provided statement as the disadvantages outweigh the listed advantages. Despite
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, I believe there should be solutions to the problem,
such
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 as reducing
university
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expenses
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 or costs for each credits so
education
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 is available for more
people
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 or improving the curricula to show the value of the
education
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.

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task response
Task response: You touch on both sides and give a view, but the ending does not fully align with your main point. Add a clear stance and back it with one or two strong ideas or facts.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and flow: Use clear link words to move from one idea to the next. Each paragraph should have one main idea and its support. Check that your examples fit the point you make.
structure
Clear structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Good attempt to discuss both sides before stating your view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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