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Some conversations are eosier to have in person, while other conversations are easier on the phone or by text messaging. Do you find this to be true? Why or why not? In what situations do you prefer one mode of communication over another? Give reasons to support your opinion

On the one hand, it is essential to acknowledge the significant advantages associated with in-person discussions. A critical aspect to consider is that people use body language, facial expressions and tone, which
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 them convey emotions and meaning accurately.
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, in workplaces, face-to-face meetings often allow managers and employees to resolve problems more effectively than through emails or text
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. What is more, another pivotal point to highlight is
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 can have a better mutual understanding,
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 demonstrates that face-to-face communication not only conveys information more clearly but
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 strengthens trust and cooperation among individuals.
On the other hand
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, making a phone call or sending text
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 plays an important role in modern life.
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, it is very convenient for people who are
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far
 apart or meeting in person is not feasible. They can keep in touch with others by video calls or
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.
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, they can have a chat together whenever they want with the help of a smartphone. I find it more valuable and useful to remember details, addresses or appointments in
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,many employees use messaging apps like WhatsApp to keep a written record of meeting schedules and task assignments. From my perspective, I learn towards making
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phone
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 or sending text
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,
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 the fact that I find it very flexible and time-saving. I can share brief information, quick
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 or updates without needing a full conversation.

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task response
State your view clearly and answer all parts of the prompt.
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Balance both sides with clear examples for each point.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence at the start of each paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeats.
grammar
Keep sentences simple and fix grammar errors (for example, 'learn towards' should be 'lean towards', 'far apart' not 'fer apart').
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Check spelling and punctuation to improve clarity.
structure
Two clear sides with 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' are used.
content
Examples from work and tech show real life use.
style
Ideas are easy to follow with simple words.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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