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The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given bar graph illustrates the different
countries
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 in terms of their film production from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
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, the number of
films
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 produced showed a steady increase in
countries
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 B,C and E throughout the period,
whereas
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 a decline was observed in the remaining
countries
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. It is worth noting that
country
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 A remained the largest producer. At the start of the period,
country
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 A was the largest producer
which
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, which
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 released around 89
films
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. Meanwhile,
Country
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 B followed at 49
films
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, almost
a
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apply
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half
times
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apply
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of
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country
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Country
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 A,
while
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countries
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 D,E and C allocated smaller shares of 18,10 and 9
films
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.
from
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From
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 2008 to 2009,
country
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 A remained the leading contributor despite a slight decline,
around
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with around
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 89 and 80
films
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. In these two years,
countries
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 B,C and E were steadily increasing at 50 to 70, 15 to 20 and 11 to 12
films
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.
Country
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 D was suddenly declining
from18 to11
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from 18 to 11
 in 2008, but climbing
to15 in2009
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to 15 in 2009
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, films, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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