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Band 2

advnces technology and automation have reduce the need for manual labour To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I
whole-heartedly
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wholeheartedly
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 agree with the benefits of technology and automation to the advancement of
man-kind
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mankind
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. It increases productivity, cost-efficiency and
time-allottment
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time allotment
 for other activities. From as early as the
industrial revolution
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Industrial Revolution
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, we see a massive growth in the global economy, stemming from the invention of machines. Modern planes and ships make global trading possible in a matter of days,
whereas
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 a hundred years ago,
this
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 may have taken months. A more recent invention
like
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, like
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 Google, has eradicated the need to travel all the way to your local library and skim through the books just to find one simple answer. The evolution of technology is the key to providing the world with the freedom to grow
further
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task response
State your view clearly at the start and end with a short line that sums your view.
content
Mention one downside of tech and how it matches the job shift, then give a view at the end.
content
Add more detail to each point with a clear example and explain why it matters.
grammar
Improve grammar and spelling, like 'revolution' and 'allocation'.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show flow, such as first, next, also, but, so.
stance
Clear stand in the first line.
content
Use good examples from tech and travel.
structure
The idea goes from past to now.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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