some argue that it is better to talk to friend and not family about problems. to what extent you agree or disagree.

Some people think that talking to a friend about a problem is better than a family member
Friend
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Friends
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often share similar experiences , making it easier to
empathize
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empathise
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. Also
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also
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also,
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they might provide a more objective perspective
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they are not as emotionally involved as family members, which can lead to more balanced advice
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, family members may sometimes judge or misunderstand,
where
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whereas
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friends can be more relatable and understanding of the specific issues one is facing

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task
Add a clear view. State if you agree or disagree at once and why.
coherence
Make the link between ideas clear. Use words like 'also','but','however' to show contrast.
content
Give more exact examples or details to back up your points.
structure
Improve structure with a short intro and a short conclusion.
content
Good balance of ideas for both sides.
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Clear idea on why friends can be easier to relate.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • objective perspective
  • emotionally involved
  • balanced advice
  • judge
  • misunderstand
  • relatable
  • generational gap
  • differences in opinions
  • relevant support
  • family dynamics
  • stress relief
  • confidentiality
  • broader family network
  • empathy
  • mutual understanding
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