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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternatives ways to decrease crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that
keep
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keeping
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prison
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prisons
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 in the
sell
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field
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 for
long
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a long
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 time
to reduce
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reduces
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crime
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crime,
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while
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other
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others
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 argue that there are several ways to
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low
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a low
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crime
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 rate. I will explain both points before giving my personal opinion. First of all, giving punishment is the best way to reduce
crime
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 in the nation. Every
crime
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 has
different
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 punishment. Some
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crime
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crimes
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such
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 as murders, rape or child
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abuse,
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 should be long sentences for
criminal
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the criminal
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.

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task response
Plan your essay with a clear start, middle and end. State the topic, give two views with reasons, then give your own view and end with a short wrap up.
content
Show both sides clearly. Do not only say one side. Give at least one reason for each view.
coherence
Link ideas. Use words like first, also, but, however to connect ideas.
grammar
Use simple and small sentences. Check grammar and spell common words correctly.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides.
content
It gives a real example of crimes to show punishment.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrence
  • Recidivism
  • Rehabilitation
  • Restorative justice
  • Community policing
  • Economic development
  • Reintegration
  • Punitive measures
  • Inhumane conditions
  • Overcrowding
  • Social services
  • Tailored approaches
  • Public sentiment
  • Root causes
  • Taxpayer burden
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