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In many countries large amounts of foods are wasted. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Nowadays, colossal amounts of
foods
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 are wasted across the globe.
This
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 essay will discuss my views about
people
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 wasting
foods
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food
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 and
precautions
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the precautions
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 we can
do
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take
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 to reduce the amount of
food
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 thrown away.
To begin
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 with, many
people
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 throw away their
food
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 and waste it.
This
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 trend has more than one
reasons
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reason
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.
Firstly
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, loads of
people
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that
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who
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 eat outside often can not finish their
foods
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food
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 or beverages. Because they see the remaining
food
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 as a burden to
carry
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carry,
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 they just lavish it away.
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, only a handful of
food
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 chains give away their remaining
food
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 to those in need or animals. Others, who throw away the remaining
food
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, usually do it so that the customers do not eat old
food
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.
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, wasting
food
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 happens
everyday
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every day
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 and in great amounts because of customer service and laziness.
In addition
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, we may not prevent
nutriments
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nutrients
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being
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from being
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 lavished
but
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, but
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it
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we
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 can reduce
it
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them
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.
For instance
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, governments could
legistate
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legislate
 a fine if
food
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 chains throw away their
food
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instead
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 of giving it to homeless
people
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 or our animal friends.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 might be educated about
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 topic and its importance.
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, designing special packages to store remaining fares would help individuals with carrying the
remainings
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remaining
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. In my opinion, hunger is a global problem that we cannot forget. To prevent it
both
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, both
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 the government and the
people
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 must work together.
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, hunger can be prevented. In conclusion, waste of daily bread is a significant problem of our era
especially
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, especially
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 when nearly a billion human
being
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beings
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 suffer from hunger. In order to solve
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this
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this,
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 we may design packages for easy carrying, governments should
legistate
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legislate
and
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, and
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 humans must be educated.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food waste
  • excessive
  • portion sizes
  • expiration dates
  • storage
  • preservation
  • inefficient
  • cultural
  • incentives
  • reduce
  • awareness
  • education
  • planning
  • organization
  • misinterpretation
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