the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
The maps compare the layout of the Islip Centre from now to the future.
Overall
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, the city will experience some development. The shops will be replaced, and it will add some new housing and roads
,
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. In
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in addition
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, the
park
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will be small. In the North of the map, the shops will be replaced by a Bus station,
shopping
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a shopping
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centre, a car
park
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and new housing.
Moreover
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, the Main road will be converted to pedestrians only.
In addition
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, they will add a road that surrounds the
city
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city,
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known as a Dual carriageway Going to the south side, the old housing is removed, it will add a new residential area in the west of the city on the Dual carriageway.
Furthermore
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, the school,
park
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and shop are still in their original area, but the size of the
park
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will decrease. The future plan shows that the
islip centre
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Islip Centre
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will be both convenient and modern, because of
bus
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the bus
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station and
Dual
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the Dual
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carriageway will
created
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be created
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there.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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