The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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line chart illustrates two different tourist
group
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groups
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, which are
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Grenby
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the Grenby
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history
museum
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and
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Grenby
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the Grenby
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amusement
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park
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about
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, about
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the daily visitation in one
week
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in
Grenby
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.
In
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On
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the x-axis
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x-axis
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x-axis,
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the
week
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is
seperated
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separated
in
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into
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days
and
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, and
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in
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on
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the
y-axis
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y-axis,
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the visitation number is noted.
Overall
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, a clear trend can be shown
,
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apply
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that the
amusement
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park
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has more
population
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visitors
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over the whole
week
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,
while
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history
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the history
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museum
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has
less
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fewer
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visitation
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visitors
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. They both have a similar pattern, starting very low,
then
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increasing steadily in the middle part of the
week
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and
then
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slighty
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slightly
increased
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increasing
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their value or slightly
fall down
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falling
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. In
Grenby
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, the history
museum
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start
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starts
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with about 290 people on Monday, the following three days
droped
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dropped
slightly, but remained quite stable
which
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, which
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is approximately 200
pupil
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pupils
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.
Then
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from Thursday to
Saturday
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Saturday,
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the
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visitors
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apply
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number increased
linear
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linearly
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,
at the end
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of Saturday at 400 people.
At the end
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of the
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week
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week,
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the
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visitors
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apply
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number
fall
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fell
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back to 350.
On the other hand
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, the
amusement
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park
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has started
on
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with
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the
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a
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similar
poplulation
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population
like
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as
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the
museum
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with
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, with
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about 300 individuals.
Thuesday
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Tuesday
to Wednesday, it increased slightly to 350 and
fall
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fell
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back to the value of Monday.
By contrast
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,
to
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at
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Museum
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the Museum
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the linear rose started in the
amusement
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park
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quite early in the
week
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, the whole process started on Wednesday and ended
in
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on
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Saturday with the
amount
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number
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of 750
visitors
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.
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Also
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Also,
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the Sunday increased slightly and reached the 800
visitors
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peak.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words grenby, museum, amusement, park, week, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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