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the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The given line graph presents information about the
number
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 of
stores
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 that closed, and the
figure
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number
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 of new
shops
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 that were opened in a specific country over a seven-year period from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it can be seen that both closed and
opened
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open
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 markets fluctuated throughout the period;
moreover
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, the
number
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openings
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of openings
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 reached its peak in the beginning.
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, it hit a low point by the end;
likewise
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, the broken line
which
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, which
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 represents
closures
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closures,
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 decreased. Eventually, it surpassed the
number
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 of
openings
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store openings
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apply
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stores
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. In terms of
openings
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opening
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shops
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, it stood at high levels in 2011, at around 8500
stores
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;
nevertheless
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, it plunged to below 4000 after one year. After that, it fluctuated for three years and reached 4000 in 2015; afterwards, the
number
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 of opened
shops
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 levelled off until
2017
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then
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 it
delined
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declined
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 to only 3000 by 2018.
Similary
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Similarly
, the figure of closed
stores
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 started at approximately 6300.
in
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In
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 2014, the broken line fell dramatically to only 500
shops
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, but it exceeded that of opened
stores
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 by around a
thousnd
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thousand
 in 2016; it remained relatively constant from 2016 to 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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