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The tabe and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. the table showed where the money come from and the charts showed how it was distributed

The tabe and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. the table showed where the money come from and the charts showed how it was distributed
The chart and table represent the police budget in millions within the years 2017 and 2018 in a British region. The table tells us where their sources of finance are, and the pie charts show where
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 income was spent
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.
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, in
2017
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 the biggest source of capital was the national government, and the weakest was from alternative sources
such
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 as grants. By 2018, the level of distribution was the same, but the income had slightly risen. In both years, the police’s top priority in spending was employee budgets. To
analyze
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, in 2017, the amount
spent
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received by the police from the government was 175.5
million
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 British
pounds
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 increased to 177.8
million
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 by 2018. Local taxes
was
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 the next top source of finance in 2017
giving
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 91.2
million
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 and
then
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 boosting it to 102.3
million
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pounds
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 in 2018. The lowest source of them all
were
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 other sources, including
grands
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grants
, in which the police only received 36
million
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pounds
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 from them, and in
2018
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2018,
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 had reached 38.5
million
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pounds
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. In total, the
overall
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 budget was 304.7
million
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 in 2017
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 and 318.6
million
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 in 2018.
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, in the former year, 75% of the police’s budget was spent on officers’ and the staff’s salaries, 17% on infrastructure like buildings and transport, leaving only 8% towards technology. In 2018, the ratios stayed the same, except the amount spent on salaries reduced to 69% and the 6% was added to the development of technological facilities.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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