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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is a debate whether spreading scientific
information
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 for reasonable use is acceptable or not. Personally, I believe that the more accessible the research results are, the more progress
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society may achieve. There are a number of advantages when
information
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 is shared in diverse aspects.
Information
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 circulation provokes insights and enhances educational fairness. Thanks to the development of technology, people deliver perspectives and knowledge on the Internet, which spreads
information
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in
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greater
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 speed.
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, we absorb a large amount of knowledge in the shortest amount of time.
This
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 cultivates independent thinking skills in society as well.
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, the government should inform
public
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the public
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medical
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about medical
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 treatment and or
origin
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the origin
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 of the disease or pandemic,
such
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 as COVID-19, to prevent
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getting infected. In my opinion, only when the
information
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 can be adopted widely, specific facts
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be known well.
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, some people might argue that scientific
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 is seen as experts’ devotion, which is too vital to share.
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, it is
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 to cause issues: conception and research content may be copied or theft.
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, I believe
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there
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 are effective ways to tackle the problem. Both
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 for the government to impose hefty fines and penalties on people who
plagiarize
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others
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 work and
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politics
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the politics
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 of identifying fake
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work out
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.
To sum up
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, the merits of
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the spreading
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 of
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 freely outweigh the defects. The problems can
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 be solved.

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coherence
Make your idea flow with a clear plan: intro, view one, view two, your view, and a strong end.
coherence
Be exact with facts and give more real examples, not only one COVID example.
grammar
Check the grammar and use the right word form; fix small errors like 'at greater speed'.
task
Balance the two sides more: tell why the other view is not enough and why yours wins.
lexical
Use easy linking words like but, and, also to join ideas.
structure
You show your view early and say it again at the end.
content
You use simple ideas and some facts to back your point.
content
You try to talk about both sides of the issue.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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