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Writing Samples
Band 2

There is a considerable amount of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having othe undesirrable effects on people's health and well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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am
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agree with
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this
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these
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 ideas, but
i'm
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 not totally
agree
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. Because
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 right
a
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, a
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car
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 can
gave
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give
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 effects to
human
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humans
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 and
contributing
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contribute
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 to global warming, meanwhile if we still use many coal power
plant
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plants
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 for our electric
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supplies
suplies
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it's
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also
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give
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contributing
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 towards global warming and people's
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health
.
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Therefore
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 we must reduce to use
coal
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of coal
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 power
plat
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plants
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.
beside
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that
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 we must have a policy to reduce a
convensional
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conventional
car
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. Because if we still use a
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conventional
car
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 and coal power plant
to
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for
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 our electric
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supplies
suplies
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it's
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it
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make
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 an effect
to
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healt
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health
 and
contributing
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contributes
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 more pollution to our
planet
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, and
make
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makes
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 global warming worse. We must
have
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a
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collaboration
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between
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us
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to make our
planet
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 healthy and cleaner. Like I said before,
I'm
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 agree with that statement
but
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, but
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 if we only reduce
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car
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cars
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 and have a policy
fo
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for
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that
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that,
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 it's not
make
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going to make
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 our
planet
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healty
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healthy
 and cleaner. We must
have
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a
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apply
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collaboration
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collaborate
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 and make
this
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planet
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 healthy and clean again.

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structure
Plan your answer first. State your view in one line. Then give 2–3 main ideas and end with a short sum up.
language
Use simple grammar. Check word form and sentence order.
content
Do not repeat the same idea. Give a small example or fact to back each point.
content
The topic is clear and you show care for the issue.
cohesion
There is some use of linking words to join ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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